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The Revolving Cycle by ~SnowyHail:iconSnowyHail:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Family Life > Ballad


Unable to speak, unable to shout
The words stay suppressed, not coming out
These shackles of hopes that chain my heart
Are squeezing me tighter, tearing me apart
The air is suffocating, it's harder to breathe
With all of these dreams that won't leave me be
Chained in the dungeon called a safe, loving home
Where, although they are here, I'm always alone
I can't look at them, a part of me dies
Whenever I look at those bright, hopeful eyes
There are no doors in these solid walls
The only way out is for me to fall
But as I fall, and leave this place
Another one comes and takes my place
The wretched guilt, she's unable to shout,
Words held suppressed, no longer let out
The guilt as I watch one suffer for me
And the guilt of joy, I'm finally free
©2008-2009 ~SnowyHail
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Author's Comments

Yes, the title does have something to do with the poem

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I wrote this after watching Gokusen.
I kinda guess this is what Shin would feel like.
Or Sano, from Hana-Kimi.
Except, they're both too good of guys to actually feel happy about leaving.

._.

Okay.
Don't listen to me. I'm not making any sense.

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~Forgotten-Phantom Jun 1, 2008, 8:03:50 PM
wow...
how do you write such lovely poems?

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~SnowyHail Jun 1, 2008, 8:32:51 PM
ah.. thank you... ^ ^;

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~AgentMoi Jun 9, 2008, 7:24:22 AM
WOW.
Your writings are incredible. Simply incredible. They are really something special. ^^
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~SnowyHail Jun 9, 2008, 11:42:39 AM
thank you!! : D

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~AgentMoi Jun 9, 2008, 12:12:27 PM
No problem! Great artists and writers should get the credit, praise, and recognition they deserve. :D
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~BlackWingedAvenger Jun 20, 2008, 10:07:20 PM
i think its called talent.

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~BlackWingedAvenger Jun 20, 2008, 10:08:03 PM
i wonder... if theres no doors... what if theres windows?

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Happy hour is every hour, everyday until the day you die. After that it becomes a happy eternity.
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~SnowyHail Jun 21, 2008, 6:00:22 PM
i find windows a tad bit depressing
windows, you get to see what's othere, but you never get to actually go out (and don't say you can just climb out of the window)
so, it's teasing you, holding freedom two inches from your face, but never letting you have it
but in answer to your questions
there are windows
and one of those windows is what i call the INTERNET!!! XD

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and Cheating is only cheating
If anyone else finds out about it in any way
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~BlackWingedAvenger Jun 21, 2008, 9:58:10 PM
but but.. what if you have a rock? its harder to get through a window than a door still, theres glass and you get cut along the way.

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Happy hour is every hour, everyday until the day you die. After that it becomes a happy eternity.
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~lazybunny Jul 2, 2008, 12:17:41 PM
oMG! This is really good ur such a great writer i can never beat u ha ha ha ha lololz

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